This is so good I'm crying. Spent all night and morning rereading it and I regret nothing. Characters' dynamic is so poetic, I beleive in every word and feel every scene so deeply I JUST AAAAAAAA Also big kudos for MC angst, you keep your fans well fed
Loved interaction with Duri. Loved new lore! Loved to be able to pet the heck outta wolfs. Also glad to see all fun time at the end of the 3rd chapter being finished. I'm still in awe of mc's and oswin's chemistry and heartbreaking history together. Im a sucker for this kind of story, and i wonder what did he lived through, what exactly made him acting like such an idiot. I've got my guesses, and I will wait. I wish he talked about choice in flowers for tea ;)
Oh, I adore Shadow btw. Point for being able to snuggle the kitten.
In Slavic folklore there is Grey Wolf, sentient and wise creature, that helps protagonist of tales. I feel connected to Duri in this regard lol.
Thank you so much! I'm gonna reread it all for Zahn scenes. And then rerun for Duri's antics.
Also. I read your nswf piece in the beginning. Hot damn 🤌🥰
I'm so glad you loved it, my friend! I can't wait to reveal all of Oswin's baggage. He's frustrating to me too because you really have to slowly chisel away at that damn wall of his. Even I think he needs to just fess up, lol.
Your favorite flower will come up later, so don't you worry. Oswin doesn't know yet that it's your favorite.
Enjoy your re-reads! There's some fun things in there to discover for all of them.
(Also more nsfw stuff to come, we just need to get the MC to a safe place first, lol. Glad you liked it, I was nervous about my smut quality and have big plans for future moments.)
This IF is the best just by the fact that you can snuggle, pet and talk to animals you've met. Thank you for satisfying my toxic need to pet anything that looks friend shaped enough for me. I swear, I'll die happily for a chance to pet a shark. P.S. Miss my dads.
Always gotta give our furry friends some love, I agree! Do not care if I get bitten, lol. You are very welcome, and if the MC winds up in the sea at some point...I could arrange some sharks. ^_^
Oh, this update is just SO GOOD! I love Duri's introduction, especially since I kinda really thought they're a wolf trying to eat the PC. I only just realized they're an RO when their golden eyes were emphasized throughout the narrative and when I checked the list of ROs and found them there. But besides that, I'm enjoying Oswin's overprotectiveness towards the PC.
Plus, the honey cakes scene. It made me grin like an idiot. 😆
Yay! I was hoping to make it a fun surprise. It's been hard to keep their nature under wraps for so long, lol. I debated about putting it in their description but wanted it to be more of a little bonus fun thing. Glad you are having a good time, my dear! ^_^
I literally started foaming at the mouth when I saw the update. I love your writing so much!! Was about to go to bed but I decided I no longer need sleep tonight <33
Hello friend! There will be more than 3 chapters for sure. Chapter 4 is nearly done as we speak. That's what I've been buried in for the last couple months. The whole story, I anticipate, will be around 12 chapters with my current plan. There is a basic outline for the entire story and I make adjustments and fixes as I write. It may end up being longer, but I can't say yet. It is already huge and just keeps growing! ^_^
just finished a first run of this game—I love it so much!!!! The writing is lovely and Oswin is my beloved. I kept accidentally calling him Oswald in my head, lmao. Just learned about the name reactions—gonna try and find as many of those as i can!! I love a good Easter egg
Thank you, my dear! Glad you're enjoying it! You know, Oswald is not a bad name for him - close enough. ^_^ Good luck with the easter eggs, I don't even remember half of them without looking, lol!
i played this for the first time recently, then i replayed it again, and again, and again.. i love this!! its really well written and immersive and its so fun how much character customisation u can do!! and i discovered that if you choose ravi as your new name, oswyn will comment on you choosing the childhood nickname he gave u, i didnt anticipate it being recognised at all so it was such a cool and lovely detail!!! im rlly rlly looking forward to updates on this! now back to replaying it again..
I am so glad you loved it, my dear! Our dear swordsman has a warm spot for that name. I'm glad you found that and are enjoying your replays. Chapter 4 is making great progress, so I hope to update in the near future. ^_^
Gods, of course I will be hooked on the reculant and not-so-secretly caring childhood friend... to be frank, I'm gonna read the heck out this story for him.
I adore mc's dads. And my true bbf. I am also very invested into mc's health. Good job onto spiritual things, I liked the worldbuilding and more to come!
wow!!! i haven't read anything THIS good in a while, i can't believe it's only demo so far 😭 i'm genuinely so invested in the plot and the world that's being set up. also not only the ROs but all characters are so endearing and lovable :') our fathers and our best friend have especially warmed my heart
Thank you, my dear! I really appreciate that. I can't wait to share more of it with you! Chapter 4 is making great progress and the remaining moments for 3 are in the oven, lol. ^_^
love this sm !! and omg, is that a zelda reference if you name your mount "epona" haha?? if so, i love the little detail + it makes me wanna input all sorts of stuff to see if there are other little references.
Yay! You noticed! It is a Zelda reference! There's a few little references in there. A couple are a bit obscure. Let me know if you discover any others! ^_^
Hey dear, would you mind making a summary of all the Easter eggs you put into the story at some point? I didn't even know there were Easter eggs before reading the comment section. I follow you on tumblr too. That would be lovely for my sixth re-read of the story. Thank you
Absolutely, my dear! There aren't that many, but it's something I'd like to add more of as things develop. I'll try to pop them on Tumblr when I get some time. Sorry for the late reply. I apparently got logged out of itch on my phone. I was wondering why it had been so quiet lately! >_<
HELP WHEN I SAW THE END THAT SAID "end of demo" AND THEN THE OTHER "chapter 4" I THOUGHT I WAS SAFE AND HAPPILY CLICKED IT ONLY FOR IT TO SAY NOTHINGS THERE😭😭😭WE NEED TO CONFESS TO OSWIN
I haven’t actually gotten in yet, but this seems cool. Absolutely gonna check it out when I have time. In the meantime, I just wanted to say, I hope there are some real good options for apathy. Not many things let you have “I don’t care” as a valid option that doesn’t just mean that you skip over things, and so when I can have apathy, I always like it, because it feels realistic to me. (I’m really apathetic, for better and worse.) Maybe even I can have some moments of pure stoicism, where something horrible happens, and I show no sign of reacting, and when someone gets confused why I don’t seem upset, I just answer with “I’m good at compartmentalizing. I’m actually very distraught, but that doesn’t help, so I just turn it off.” I dunno. It’s the kind of thing you don’t see often, but it’s how I react to lots of bad situations, and I’ve been in some REALLY bad situations. Sorry for the tirade. I’m writing this at midnight, which turns off all my mental filters. Thanks for reading this nonsense. ✌️
Thank you for popping in, my friend! I hope when you get a chance to check it out that you have fun with it. Sadly, I don't think much of the choices will be quite apathetic. A couple are probably in the vein of stoicism though, so I hope those are at least satisfying for your MC. I tend to write with a lot of emotion so stoicism and apathy are weak points for me! Either way, I hope you do find something to enjoy about your MC here. ^_^
this was great, the writing and story are amazing and I'm highly looking forward to hopefully being able to use the lumberjack background in combat, Oswin has great interactions and leaves you wising to learn more and to find the reason to his changes, and Zahn has a great personality, that's sweet and bubbles with kindness. both of their stories are gut-wrenching and it's great. I can't wait to see what future chapters hold and wish you the best going forward. (I also wanted to say I'm sorry to hear about Shadow, the interactions in the story with him were amazing. I loved every moment that included him and its never easy to lose someone close. i wanted to offer my condolences and just wanted to say to take your time, take care of yourself, and not to press yourself into doing more then you are comfortable with
Heck yes, my friend! I am excited to get MC into a real battle, especially the axe-wielding ones. I am so happy you enjoyed the story and characters so far. I can't wait to reveal more of each person's story as we go and I hope I can tell it the way I feel it.
Thank you for your kind words and condolences, I really appreciate them. I've been sure to let myself grieve the way I need to, and I do feel that I'm healing and doing a lot better now. :3
I started and finished the demo today. It's incredible! I feel so connected to these characters, and find myself tearing up at the emotional interactions between Oswin and MC. Wondering why it is he has become distant from her. Perhaps, he was so afraid to lose her because he feels so much for her, so to protect himself he distanced himself? That is my theory for now. I can't wait to see what you come up with next.
Just wanted to leave a comment about how much I really love your work!
I love how you give your characters depth without launching into index pages with 20 paragraphs of backstory nestled away in a link, within a link, within a link. In some other stories, the characters you interact with feel like they melt into the code when you stop talking to them, but I don't feel the same when I'm playing this IF.
I also love how you write about some heavier themes without being overly gratuitous, or needlessly explicit about certain details. Think it really helps some people who have bad experiences with those topics not settle into the scene too heavily, and at the same time, leave readers who don't share the same experiences with enough detail to interpret the scene accurately.
Lastly, I wanna say that I'm really sorry to hear about Shadow :( I already love story!Shadow to bits, and promise to love him forevermore. I think it's a lovely gesture to immortalise his memory in this IF!
All the best for the future chapters, and remember to take care of yourself while working on this amazing project :)
I am so glad you enjoyed the story and like my style. Your comments have really warmed my heart and given me an encouragement boost - these are the things I fret about. I wanted to do a heavier IF that wouldn't leave readers bereft at the same time - life is hard enough! I am hoping that those connections with the characters will carry both the reader and the MC through those difficult moments as we progress.
Thank you also for your condolences. Shadow was a one of a kind kitty, and sometimes I wondered if he was a little angry wizard trapped in a cat's body, lol. It seemed fitting that he travel my imaginary little world with an equally odd merchant for company. ^_^
I finish the demo today and for now i'm loving it so much!
I really like the form you write and the characters are very likeable, Oswin is so funny when you're playful with him, and Zhan is so sweet, I wanna take care of them (even if i'm a little cautious of them)
But in my top of characters for now are the MC parents, I love them so much, they feel so warm? Idk how to explain it, just they feel like home.
Also I love the mule, I have to try the others horses but for now my girl Epona is winning.
For resume, great job! I will waiting happy for more!^v^
And my condolences for you loss, I hope you and your husband get well soon
Thank you so much for the kind words, my friend! I am thrilled that you are attached to the MC fathers, and I think I know what you mean that they feel like home. There are more antics in store for Oswin and Zahn, so I hope you will enjoy them as they develop. I'm glad you used the name Epona! The Legend of Zelda is near and dear to my heart, so it's only fair to have a faithful friend like her to guide you! ^_^
It seems I have regained my love for IF's after reading this one (as I typically avoid WiPs for fear of discontinuation). The characters have captured my attention and I actually care about what happens to them. The parents are so endearing, I particularly like the dynamic that you set up for them. ALSO YES, finally, gay dads. I would die for them.
The RO's typically bore me in other books, but you managed to make my cold frigid heart FEEL with this one. I love the background that you gave them, it got me emotionally invested. I know we haven't been introduced to the rest, but as it stands, I would also die for Zahn and Oswin.
The story itself is interesting, though I'm not gonna lie it reminds me a little bit of 13Leagues' ToA, which is also another IF that I absolutely adore (with the similar theme of the MC's death-curse and the involvement of gods). I absolutely love your writing and your work is at my "most awaited" list. Thank you so much for creating this world and sharing it to the rest of us. It has been a joy.
May Shadow live on in your work, I would like to see more of the little guy in the story. I hope things are well!
That is beyond awesome to me, my dear! I know that feeling, those discontinuation woes. I keep shoving mine in a closet marked with caution tape, lol. All the more reason, I do not want to let you or any other IF lover down.
I am thrilled that you've taken a shine to the family and friends I've made for the MC and the world. I have read Superstition (every season like 7 times) from 13Leagues, but believe it or not, I haven't read ToA yet! It's on the ever-growing list of things for me to catch up on. Maybe I will hold off just in case, I don't want to be under the influence while I'm writing, lol.
You've made me giddy with delight at your kind words, my friend. I am also hoping to wiggle in my favorite kitty cat as much as possible. He'll be there to demand to be held and get fur on your clothes. Thank you for reading! ^_^
I really enjoyed the story! It's so well written and you can clearly see that your choices do matter. Wish the author a lot of motivation and time to write. Looking forward to more!
I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thank you so much; I am hoping to really make those choices shine through the story. It gets a bit taxing but it's still so much fun to add those flavors. ^_^
I'm elated that you loved it! I'm working on a small update to chapter 3 as we speak. Just a few extra optional moments, nothing major, and some fixes of course. ^_^
LOL, I am glad I could get a cackle from you, my dear! That's a long-standing joke for me. I have used that name while reading other IFs for a laugh, and it drives my bestie insane. If you're adventurous to choose that as your MC's name, there will be some extra flavor-text here and there. Is it worth naming your character after pasta though? Debatable.
I'm glad you love it! And I'm excited to bring you more! ^_^
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i love this game so much pls don't die before finishing it 🫶 (also i am forcing myself to stick to Oswin and not go absolutely fucking feral for Duri)
LOL, no joke I'm always paranoid about kicking it early, but this has become a legit fear. I NEED to finish it.
Duri does like feral; they'll wait for you ;)
mwahah >:)
Oswin>>>
Oswin ^_^
I thought oswin was my fav but damn duri really fighting for that spot in my heart right now
SAME
It's the snaggletooth, lol
Temptation is one of their powers, lol
This is so so so good!!!! 💙
Thank you, dear! Glad you enjoy it! ^_^
This is so good I'm crying. Spent all night and morning rereading it and I regret nothing. Characters' dynamic is so poetic, I beleive in every word and feel every scene so deeply I JUST AAAAAAAA Also big kudos for MC angst, you keep your fans well fed
I love this so much, but be sure to rest too! Don't end up like MC, lol (or do and get carried around by a love-interest, I don't judge). ^_^
sticking with one RO is so hard, but I’m determined to see Oswin through lol
The others will always be waiting for their turn ^_^
Ive decided that oswin is a werewolf and thats why he's weird
That is fitting in a way...
Omg, i love the first interaction between Oswin and Zahn, quite hilarious and then the mc going between them 🤣❤️.
They're a handful, MC needs a rolled newspaper and a spray bottle to keep them settled.
a new chapter. Hooray!
It's been an adventure for sure!
Aaaaaaaaa. Yessss new chapter, it was só cute and i love jealous Oswin and Duri is pretty perceptive. Plus puppies!!
Everything is better with puppies ^_^
Loved interaction with Duri. Loved new lore! Loved to be able to pet the heck outta wolfs. Also glad to see all fun time at the end of the 3rd chapter being finished. I'm still in awe of mc's and oswin's chemistry and heartbreaking history together. Im a sucker for this kind of story, and i wonder what did he lived through, what exactly made him acting like such an idiot. I've got my guesses, and I will wait. I wish he talked about choice in flowers for tea ;)
Oh, I adore Shadow btw. Point for being able to snuggle the kitten.
In Slavic folklore there is Grey Wolf, sentient and wise creature, that helps protagonist of tales. I feel connected to Duri in this regard lol.
Thank you so much! I'm gonna reread it all for Zahn scenes. And then rerun for Duri's antics.
Also. I read your nswf piece in the beginning. Hot damn 🤌🥰
I'm so glad you loved it, my friend! I can't wait to reveal all of Oswin's baggage. He's frustrating to me too because you really have to slowly chisel away at that damn wall of his. Even I think he needs to just fess up, lol.
Your favorite flower will come up later, so don't you worry. Oswin doesn't know yet that it's your favorite.
Enjoy your re-reads! There's some fun things in there to discover for all of them.
(Also more nsfw stuff to come, we just need to get the MC to a safe place first, lol. Glad you liked it, I was nervous about my smut quality and have big plans for future moments.)
I would die for Zahn
Awe, you'll make the cry with that kind of talk. Not many have been willing to do much for them before. <3
This IF is the best just by the fact that you can snuggle, pet and talk to animals you've met. Thank you for satisfying my toxic need to pet anything that looks friend shaped enough for me. I swear, I'll die happily for a chance to pet a shark. P.S. Miss my dads.
Heck yea, miss them dearly. Hope da's leg is okayish now!
Da is getting by pretty well, still trying to escape the house too, lol. (He's trying to keep Papa's mind from worrying about MC)
Always gotta give our furry friends some love, I agree! Do not care if I get bitten, lol. You are very welcome, and if the MC winds up in the sea at some point...I could arrange some sharks. ^_^
PS: your dads miss you too, like so much.
Was super enjoyable. All three ROs are fascinating, and the story is really intriguing can't wait for more content.
And I can't wait to get you that content, my dear! You'll be able to collect the whole set before long! ^_^
Oh, this update is just SO GOOD! I love Duri's introduction, especially since I kinda really thought they're a wolf trying to eat the PC. I only just realized they're an RO when their golden eyes were emphasized throughout the narrative and when I checked the list of ROs and found them there. But besides that, I'm enjoying Oswin's overprotectiveness towards the PC.
Plus, the honey cakes scene. It made me grin like an idiot. 😆
Im with you about Oswin. God, the man has an iron will. I would crawl into mc's lap after this for sure!😔🤣
Yay! I was hoping to make it a fun surprise. It's been hard to keep their nature under wraps for so long, lol. I debated about putting it in their description but wanted it to be more of a little bonus fun thing. Glad you are having a good time, my dear! ^_^
Absolutely adored this update! I am so excited for the next chapter!
So glad you enjoyed it, my friend! I am also so pumped to get chapter 5 going! ^_^
"Have you known people outside your church to be wicked?"
"Yeah."
That felt like a really heavy "yeah." If someone hurt Zahn, I'm going to have words with them. And by words, I mean fists.
*clears throat* Yeeeaaahh, about that... 😬
I literally started foaming at the mouth when I saw the update. I love your writing so much!! Was about to go to bed but I decided I no longer need sleep tonight <33
I hope you eventually got some rest (and maybe a napkin for the, uh, foam), lol. I hope you enjoyed, my dear - thank you for checking it out! ^_^
Are there going to be only 3 chapters to this game? If so, are you currently working on more chapters??
Hello friend! There will be more than 3 chapters for sure. Chapter 4 is nearly done as we speak. That's what I've been buried in for the last couple months. The whole story, I anticipate, will be around 12 chapters with my current plan. There is a basic outline for the entire story and I make adjustments and fixes as I write. It may end up being longer, but I can't say yet. It is already huge and just keeps growing! ^_^
just finished a first run of this game—I love it so much!!!! The writing is lovely and Oswin is my beloved. I kept accidentally calling him Oswald in my head, lmao. Just learned about the name reactions—gonna try and find as many of those as i can!! I love a good Easter egg
Thank you, my dear! Glad you're enjoying it! You know, Oswald is not a bad name for him - close enough. ^_^ Good luck with the easter eggs, I don't even remember half of them without looking, lol!
I loved when oswin called me a lazy asshole for naming my mule "horse"
LMAO, I am so glad you discovered that! There's a few names that yield special responses, and I'd like to add more when I have some time. ^_^
i played this for the first time recently, then i replayed it again, and again, and again.. i love this!! its really well written and immersive and its so fun how much character customisation u can do!! and i discovered that if you choose ravi as your new name, oswyn will comment on you choosing the childhood nickname he gave u, i didnt anticipate it being recognised at all so it was such a cool and lovely detail!!! im rlly rlly looking forward to updates on this! now back to replaying it again..
I am so glad you loved it, my dear! Our dear swordsman has a warm spot for that name. I'm glad you found that and are enjoying your replays. Chapter 4 is making great progress, so I hope to update in the near future. ^_^
Gods, of course I will be hooked on the reculant and not-so-secretly caring childhood friend... to be frank, I'm gonna read the heck out this story for him.
I adore mc's dads. And my true bbf. I am also very invested into mc's health. Good job onto spiritual things, I liked the worldbuilding and more to come!
Oswin thinks he's being all sneaky, but he is so bad at it - terrible liar too - it's cute though. I'm thrilled you're enjoying it, my friend! ^_^
I love this so much!
Glad you enjoyed it, my friend! ^_^
wow!!! i haven't read anything THIS good in a while, i can't believe it's only demo so far 😭 i'm genuinely so invested in the plot and the world that's being set up. also not only the ROs but all characters are so endearing and lovable :') our fathers and our best friend have especially warmed my heart
Thank you, my dear! I really appreciate that. I can't wait to share more of it with you! Chapter 4 is making great progress and the remaining moments for 3 are in the oven, lol. ^_^
love this sm !! and omg, is that a zelda reference if you name your mount "epona" haha?? if so, i love the little detail + it makes me wanna input all sorts of stuff to see if there are other little references.
Yay! You noticed! It is a Zelda reference! There's a few little references in there. A couple are a bit obscure. Let me know if you discover any others! ^_^
Hey dear, would you mind making a summary of all the Easter eggs you put into the story at some point? I didn't even know there were Easter eggs before reading the comment section. I follow you on tumblr too. That would be lovely for my sixth re-read of the story. Thank you
Absolutely, my dear! There aren't that many, but it's something I'd like to add more of as things develop. I'll try to pop them on Tumblr when I get some time. Sorry for the late reply. I apparently got logged out of itch on my phone. I was wondering why it had been so quiet lately! >_<
HELP WHEN I SAW THE END THAT SAID "end of demo" AND THEN THE OTHER "chapter 4" I THOUGHT I WAS SAFE AND HAPPILY CLICKED IT ONLY FOR IT TO SAY NOTHINGS THERE😭😭😭WE NEED TO CONFESS TO OSWIN
Same 😭
Hang in there! ^_^
So sorry, my dear, had to leave that little tease in, lol. Don't lose hope, though, chapter 4 is making great progress! ^_^
Same!! I loved Oswin so much!
No words
10000/10
You have no words, and I have too many - let's make a deal, lol. Thank you, my dear, I appreciate your kindness. ^_^
More of oswin>>>
easily one of the best IF omg...
You are much too kind, my friend. I don't know what to say! ^_^
I haven’t actually gotten in yet, but this seems cool. Absolutely gonna check it out when I have time. In the meantime, I just wanted to say, I hope there are some real good options for apathy. Not many things let you have “I don’t care” as a valid option that doesn’t just mean that you skip over things, and so when I can have apathy, I always like it, because it feels realistic to me. (I’m really apathetic, for better and worse.) Maybe even I can have some moments of pure stoicism, where something horrible happens, and I show no sign of reacting, and when someone gets confused why I don’t seem upset, I just answer with “I’m good at compartmentalizing. I’m actually very distraught, but that doesn’t help, so I just turn it off.” I dunno. It’s the kind of thing you don’t see often, but it’s how I react to lots of bad situations, and I’ve been in some REALLY bad situations. Sorry for the tirade. I’m writing this at midnight, which turns off all my mental filters. Thanks for reading this nonsense. ✌️
Thank you for popping in, my friend! I hope when you get a chance to check it out that you have fun with it. Sadly, I don't think much of the choices will be quite apathetic. A couple are probably in the vein of stoicism though, so I hope those are at least satisfying for your MC. I tend to write with a lot of emotion so stoicism and apathy are weak points for me! Either way, I hope you do find something to enjoy about your MC here. ^_^
I hope there's gonna be a book 2 and maybe 3 loved it ^^
Me too! LOL I have no idea how big this will end up being, but I'll do what it takes to get the whole story out there. ^_^
this was great, the writing and story are amazing and I'm highly looking forward to hopefully being able to use the lumberjack background in combat, Oswin has great interactions and leaves you wising to learn more and to find the reason to his changes, and Zahn has a great personality, that's sweet and bubbles with kindness. both of their stories are gut-wrenching and it's great. I can't wait to see what future chapters hold and wish you the best going forward. (I also wanted to say I'm sorry to hear about Shadow, the interactions in the story with him were amazing. I loved every moment that included him and its never easy to lose someone close. i wanted to offer my condolences and just wanted to say to take your time, take care of yourself, and not to press yourself into doing more then you are comfortable with
Heck yes, my friend! I am excited to get MC into a real battle, especially the axe-wielding ones. I am so happy you enjoyed the story and characters so far. I can't wait to reveal more of each person's story as we go and I hope I can tell it the way I feel it.
Thank you for your kind words and condolences, I really appreciate them. I've been sure to let myself grieve the way I need to, and I do feel that I'm healing and doing a lot better now. :3
I started and finished the demo today. It's incredible! I feel so connected to these characters, and find myself tearing up at the emotional interactions between Oswin and MC. Wondering why it is he has become distant from her. Perhaps, he was so afraid to lose her because he feels so much for her, so to protect himself he distanced himself? That is my theory for now. I can't wait to see what you come up with next.
Thank you so much! I am thrilled you enjoyed it! There's a lot to unpack with Oswin's fickleness, so strap in. ^_^
The mini update with Oswin was adorable and I loved it!
I'm glad you loved it! It was fun to write too. It's good for Oswin to feel like a kid again sometimes. ^_^
Just wanted to leave a comment about how much I really love your work!
I love how you give your characters depth without launching into index pages with 20 paragraphs of backstory nestled away in a link, within a link, within a link. In some other stories, the characters you interact with feel like they melt into the code when you stop talking to them, but I don't feel the same when I'm playing this IF.
I also love how you write about some heavier themes without being overly gratuitous, or needlessly explicit about certain details. Think it really helps some people who have bad experiences with those topics not settle into the scene too heavily, and at the same time, leave readers who don't share the same experiences with enough detail to interpret the scene accurately.
Lastly, I wanna say that I'm really sorry to hear about Shadow :( I already love story!Shadow to bits, and promise to love him forevermore. I think it's a lovely gesture to immortalise his memory in this IF!
All the best for the future chapters, and remember to take care of yourself while working on this amazing project :)
I am so glad you enjoyed the story and like my style. Your comments have really warmed my heart and given me an encouragement boost - these are the things I fret about. I wanted to do a heavier IF that wouldn't leave readers bereft at the same time - life is hard enough! I am hoping that those connections with the characters will carry both the reader and the MC through those difficult moments as we progress.
Thank you also for your condolences. Shadow was a one of a kind kitty, and sometimes I wondered if he was a little angry wizard trapped in a cat's body, lol. It seemed fitting that he travel my imaginary little world with an equally odd merchant for company. ^_^
I finish the demo today and for now i'm loving it so much!
I really like the form you write and the characters are very likeable, Oswin is so funny when you're playful with him, and Zhan is so sweet, I wanna take care of them (even if i'm a little cautious of them)
But in my top of characters for now are the MC parents, I love them so much, they feel so warm? Idk how to explain it, just they feel like home.
Also I love the mule, I have to try the others horses but for now my girl Epona is winning.
For resume, great job! I will waiting happy for more!^v^
And my condolences for you loss, I hope you and your husband get well soon
Thank you so much for the kind words, my friend! I am thrilled that you are attached to the MC fathers, and I think I know what you mean that they feel like home. There are more antics in store for Oswin and Zahn, so I hope you will enjoy them as they develop. I'm glad you used the name Epona! The Legend of Zelda is near and dear to my heart, so it's only fair to have a faithful friend like her to guide you! ^_^
It seems I have regained my love for IF's after reading this one (as I typically avoid WiPs for fear of discontinuation). The characters have captured my attention and I actually care about what happens to them. The parents are so endearing, I particularly like the dynamic that you set up for them. ALSO YES, finally, gay dads. I would die for them.
The RO's typically bore me in other books, but you managed to make my cold frigid heart FEEL with this one. I love the background that you gave them, it got me emotionally invested. I know we haven't been introduced to the rest, but as it stands, I would also die for Zahn and Oswin.
The story itself is interesting, though I'm not gonna lie it reminds me a little bit of 13Leagues' ToA, which is also another IF that I absolutely adore (with the similar theme of the MC's death-curse and the involvement of gods). I absolutely love your writing and your work is at my "most awaited" list. Thank you so much for creating this world and sharing it to the rest of us. It has been a joy.
May Shadow live on in your work, I would like to see more of the little guy in the story. I hope things are well!
That is beyond awesome to me, my dear! I know that feeling, those discontinuation woes. I keep shoving mine in a closet marked with caution tape, lol. All the more reason, I do not want to let you or any other IF lover down.
I am thrilled that you've taken a shine to the family and friends I've made for the MC and the world. I have read Superstition (every season like 7 times) from 13Leagues, but believe it or not, I haven't read ToA yet! It's on the ever-growing list of things for me to catch up on. Maybe I will hold off just in case, I don't want to be under the influence while I'm writing, lol.
You've made me giddy with delight at your kind words, my friend. I am also hoping to wiggle in my favorite kitty cat as much as possible. He'll be there to demand to be held and get fur on your clothes. Thank you for reading! ^_^
I really enjoyed the story! It's so well written and you can clearly see that your choices do matter. Wish the author a lot of motivation and time to write. Looking forward to more!
I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thank you so much; I am hoping to really make those choices shine through the story. It gets a bit taxing but it's still so much fun to add those flavors. ^_^
I just finished playing through the demo and I'm so in love with the writting! I can't wait for more!! <33
I'm elated that you loved it! I'm working on a small update to chapter 3 as we speak. Just a few extra optional moments, nothing major, and some fixes of course. ^_^
I can't wait!!! <333
Please, I cackled! xD
-Noodles: "Noodles"
Anyway! I love the story! I am excited for more of this! <3
LOL, I am glad I could get a cackle from you, my dear! That's a long-standing joke for me. I have used that name while reading other IFs for a laugh, and it drives my bestie insane. If you're adventurous to choose that as your MC's name, there will be some extra flavor-text here and there. Is it worth naming your character after pasta though? Debatable.
I'm glad you love it! And I'm excited to bring you more! ^_^