omg i love the plot and the characters- damn they're so fine. Also is there a chance that there's poly routes!! I would love to see one with Duri and Oz, literally one's a wolf and u have a guy trying to convince evryone that wolves will never hurt anyone unless necessary though not necessarily Duri in particular >:D seems like there could be more going on HAHA literally thinking abt how Oz may bicker with Duri when he's in human form but softens whenever he's in wolf form bcos he can't help his fondness for his wolf form! eager for the next chapter while i go back to studying for my finals hehe :3
peak fiction fr ToT I AM SOSOSO INVESTED TO SEE HOW THIS TURNS OUT!!!!
comments on our companions/ROs
(playing with a female character for now) oswin: he's got that dawg in him but i like his protective spirit zahn: such a goofy goober, love him duri: why does he remind me of gale and halsin from BG3 at the same time
i love the dads and lakota sm!!! they really make me feel like my character got the love she needs to keep going!
and i love my horsie Luchika ofc :3
keep it up!!! I really am invested to see how this goes! if there's one thing i can recommend
listen to some music when writing <3 really helps get you into the vibe of what you write... i personally listened to the MHRise soundtrack while reading because oml it fit well with my character (fiorayne)...
but enough yapping from a monster hunter nerd... ENJOY THIS PEAK! i'm rooting for you!! and in the words of palpatine... "We will watch your career with great interest."
-love, LightningMeliodas, just a random monster hunter nerd and avid gamer.
I just finished through chapter 4 and I love this so muchhh. (btw maybe spoilers so CAUTION :> )
Anyways, I just want to say how much I love this story, the world building, even the characters!
I love the parents so muchhh, right when they were mentioned, I already loved them (I even maybe almost cried at a few scenes including the cow scene tbh )
I also really love all the little details and interactions with the characters and how they interacted w/ each other (platonic or not).
And I just wanted to say, the world building of this story is amazing, every little addition to the story always left me a little amazed. I really can't wait until chapter 5 comes out!
Though I do understand writing all that takes a lot time (and work!) So take your time ofc! Take breaks if you need them!
Anyways, for now, I'll probably re-play for each of the romances/companions (prob Duri first) >:D
Thank you so much for the kind words, my friend! I am so glad you are finding so much to enjoy. I can't wait to get chapter 5 out, my goal is to have it out this month (it's been a rough month though, but I am striving forward on it)! ^_^
To start it off: If you're hesitating on reading this. STOP. READ IT NOW!!! I PROMISE IT'S WORTH IT. VERY MUCH SO! PLS, READ IT AND SWOON WID ME!!!!!! QAQ
(long message ahead I apologize in advance so sorry ;_;)
The way my lips curled down in desperate sadness after seeing "Thank you for reading" 😭 I've never felt so so SO hollow before, it's just so GOOD. GREAT. AMAZING! I LOVE IT SO MUCH!!! So hey, dear author... what do you say about another faithful fan who pledges that this is one of her favorite IFs of all time now ;)
I LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE my parents. Da 'n Papa! They're such lovable and caring fathers I couldn't have asked for better ones. I love them with all my heart, I can't wait to get better and to go home and hug them again!!! (that one scene with MC crying for their parents' company and wanting to go home while in pain broke me btw)
ANYWAY. I romanced Oswin the entirety of the game (tho I did stray away a couple times to check what would happen with the other ROs... cough) but I always went back to choose my beloved Oswin in the end! All the events with him, his moments, I treasure them all with my whole heart! I have so much more to say about him, but I'll bleed my heart out once the game iz finished. (pls expect like 100k words) (the key scene made me bawl btw)
Ok so to summarize how I feel about the others:
Lakota: BEST.FRIEND.EVER.
Mule (I named her... uh, better not say): I've only had her for a day and a half, but if anything happened to her, I would kill everyone in this room and then myself.
Zahn: The sweetest, they deserve more LOVE. So caring and kind, like cotton-candy. Adorable af. 2nd fav after Oswin<3
Duri: Fluffy. Sexy. Hot. Did I mention FLUFFY yet?
She-wolf: I've only had her for a day and a half, but if anything happened to her, I would kill everyone in this room and then myself.
Nathan: HOT. Love the pet-names btw. (WHY IS HE NOT AN RO????!!!!)
that's that, I can't wait to meet the others! so so so excited!!!
Everyone is EXTREMELY loveable. I can't find myself hating or disliking anyone!!! HOW, author?! You're amazing! Truly, thank you for this. Genuinely made my day. (The Election Ruined It But You Made Me Feel Better) Please always take breaks, stay hydrated! I love you so much (as a fan) Will be rooting for you and this masterpiece of a story<3333
Awe, my friend you are too kind! Your message made my day - big time.
I am so happy to add you to the coven of devoted fans, my dear. There is always room here. ^_^
I am thrilled that you have found so much to love about it, and I can't wait to share more with you (also, no shame in sampling the other ROs, we'll just keep that between us, lol).
I will strive to bring more memorable and lovable moments with these precious characters in the months to come. I also had a rough day and spent it in and out of despair. But GC will be a safe space for me, for you, and for everyone that comes here. Thank you for stopping by and for the sweet message, it was a truly bright light for me today. ^_^
I'm not too far in, but I've made decent progress, and I have a few complaints. Know that this is meant to be helpful, and that this is literally all the fault I can find in this game. It's a very fun game so far.
- Dear god, there are so many grammatical errors. This entire thing is gonna need to be proofread to clear them all out. Most of them are harmless, mostly only annoying to grammar nuts like me, but some do obfuscate you intentions a little.
- Menu navigation is a touch borked. Sometimes back to game doesn't work (though you do seem aware of it, thank you for offering solutions to that one) and if I ever save, the save menu WILL NOT reopen unless I open and close settings.
- I am very early on, so I may not have the best perspective of it, but I have to say that the game does seem a bit designed with female characters in mind. It's not too bad, but it is noticeable, particularly in the customization at the start of the game.
And that's it. Man, if that's all the flaw I can find (and I started looking), you're doing pretty good. Just some gentle editing and a bit of wrangling of the spaghetti code, and you've got a quality work right here. I'd pay around $15 for this with those changes. With these current issues, though, it ends up feeling a little unprofessional, which makes it a much harder sell. Seeming even a little unprofessional does pretty big harm to your salability. But again, this is far less work than many games need, and it's one fun game. I hope this little criticism helps, and I hope to see this baby on Steam one day.
I will say the last few parts of your criticisms seem highly unnecessary - because the IF is currently free (and free games or books etc. will be quite unprofessional) also most IF authors I've seen who charge anything have a patreon (that the author doesn't have) which you opt into for bonus content
The most I've seen an IF go for is 12$ (I think authors deserve more but that's besides the point) and that's on the high end
Which is all to say whatever prices the author 'would' charge you'd get about what you'd pay for but the author isn't charging anything so it's not worth speculating on
I think speculating on what it "would" go for IS important - this says demo, after all, which implies a full, paid version. And I was only attempting to state what I would pay with that comment, not what it would be worth. Also, does IF stand for interactive fiction? I've never seen that acronym before.
Yes! If you search IF games anything interactive fiction will show up
Also I would sorta be repeating myself but since Lunan said they've recently thought about selling the full game and writing with that goal in mind I'll leave that discussion and thought process for them (lord knows I'm never gonna make an IF myself lol)
I'm with you on that. I like to give my input about what's "wrong", because everything else is so right, but I'm just some guy. And who am I to proclaim something objectively anything? I just believe player feedback is important. But at the end of the day, everything is up to Lunan. As long as this story concludes satisfactorily, I won't complain.
Thank you, my dear, I do appreciate constructive notes, especially since I do this project alone! ^_^
I know there is going to be issues since I have no real editor or play-tester and am learning as I go. I had 2 people very briefly proof the beginning, but other than that, it's just been me. I have never coded anything in my life before this either. So, this spaghetti is going to be unhinged, my friend, lol.
Going to note too, that when I began this project - it was not for salability. It was just for the passion of it (the thought of putting it on Steam was like a far-off and untouchable dream). While I wanted it as professional as I could manage, that wasn't the end-goal, so those things were not a focus. It wasn't until sort of recently, with readers encouraging me, that I began really thinking about polishing and selling it one day. It would be a dream come true, to be sure.
Since I am now looking at possibly selling it one day, it will get extensive copyediting and refining. I just want the full story out for right now.
The menu navigation will get an overhaul when I can focus on it. I have a lot of things I want to implement on the stats along with a journal page to track the story. What's there now just won't suffice for all I have planned. I think some of the issues rest in template I've used, but with some research I can fix them.
I've had the "female-leaning" reference made once before, and I'll say what I said then - I truly believe that depends on your perception of what is inherently male, female or anything in-between. I do realize most of my audience is female-leaning, but I have more often received comments that my writing wasn't as gendered as most out there. I do not believe in gender roles or that things should be gendered - period. The lens I see through is a-gendered as it is, so I just don't see it, personally.
Hey, don't worry too much. I also said all this as something of a utilitarian - most people looking at indie stuff don't care too much about professionalism, and I'm a grammar nut, so most people playing won't notice most of those little errors. As for the female-leaning thing, it's only really even noticeable in character creation, and even then, not all that visible unless you're looking. And the menu navigation was already something you were clearly aware of, so I'm not fussed about it.
Hmm...that was quite unexpected. You really should mention either in the description or in the trigger warning section that we have two gay fathers....I think that's...a bit important no? Sorry but I can't read your story because of that. But I wish you good luck with your work.
Two gay dads do not require a trigger warning, but your comment sure does for homophobia. Don't be sorry, if that is where your line is, I'd rather you not read my work anyway, and I certainly do not need your well-wishes either.
That's fine, but you still need to give some warning about it because your work could be seen by other people who aren't looking for that kind of content. They're not gender-selectable like everyone else, you feel me?
Well, you don't have to put it in the trigger warning specifically. What I'm saying is that you need to make it more obvious in the description who finds and adopts the main character. Because I read it and didn't catch that. Maybe adding Gay tag will also help.
You are not understanding, and I fully realize that you will likely not in a conversation with me. Should readers be "notified" about heterosexual parents too? I suspect your answer is 'no.' That is my issue with what you are suggesting. I will not treat parents with non-hetero orientations any differently in fiction or in real life. End of story.
You need a trigger warning... for what now? I'm pretty sure this game is literally in the LGBT category in the tags. I don't think I've ever read a book that had a big red sign that said "gays portrayed!! read with caution" goodluck in your pursuit of divine heterosexual literature.
The LGBT category doesn't say much. I've played a huge number of games from this category and I'm quite happy with everything. Because either I choose the gender of the characters or I can ignore romantic interests that don't suit my tastes. Here it's absolutely inevitable, so it's worth putting some kind of warning about it. Maybe adding a Gay tag would be nice.
We've established that isn't going to happen because it's ridiculous and the author doesn't want to and it's their work so this is a redundant argument. You made your suggestion and We've established this game is not for you. Good luck in your pursuit once again. I love the gay dad's. I hope they stay forever and always Amen.
Why do you feel so attacked that they put two homosexual parents when it really doesn't effect anyone nor anything. It's painful to see you whine over a game that you don't have to play or even think about. It just really aggrivates me, that small-minded people exist and are more prominent on the internet as ever, as someone who has been discriminated for the person who I am sexually I am intrested in. LGBTQ tags were put in for people who don't like those kinds of things; LGBTQ tags shouldn't be used for what you are describing.
What i legit fail to understand myself is what exactly is the trigger warning here supposed to be for? Because they are gay? Andddd??? It's not like they are out here having sex in every scene or walking around with their asses out. And even if they were this is an 18+ rated game 🙄 but they aren't they are raising an orphan wtf is so triggering about that?
Stupid shit like this makes my brain hurt. Christ alive. Oh no look it's two people who love each other. The horror...
I've never made reviews or rated stories but this was amazing! it took my attention and the characters are to die for! I'm totally obsessed wit oswin. i love how brutal it is but also charming, and i cant get over papa and da :0. i cant wait to see wat happens next :)
I am thankful that you have stopped by, my dear, and that you are enjoying my story and characters. Brutal and charming is the best compliment to me, lol. I am really shooting for this very month for the next chapter as well, so I hope it won't too long for you to wait! ^_^
This IF is everything I've ever wanted and more I'm so in love with it! You are incredible author and idk I just don't have enough words to say how much I like this story
A friend introduced me to your lovely IF a few days ago and I have already played through the available chapters several times, playing with different options and such. I absolutely love it and am excited to see where the story goes from here! All the characters are so much fun to get to know and I absolutely love the world you have created. Thank you so much for sharing it with us!
Thank you so much for the very kind words. It brings me much joy that you are enjoying reading and rereading. I can't wait to bring you more to love. ^_^
Okay, I've only just found this and am more hooked than any other IF i've come across and I have to pause to comment this. (potential spoilers if you haven't played)
I named my character Ravi on name day for the sentiment from parents AND Oswin. And there's a CALL out TO THAT? I absolutely lost my mind. I already knew this was easily already in my top 3, and it just became my top for that absolutely insanely intricate detail. Thank you so much for this insane work of art.
Oh, my friend I am so glad you found that and appreciated it! I love little things like that in IFs, so I'm trying to remember to add them. I have a few things that I plan to go back and code more callbacks to as well. Sometimes when I get into the writing, those details slip from my mind. Thank you so much for your kind words, I hope GC continues to bring you joy as the journey pushes on. ^_^
I'm so glad you like that, my dear. I want to keep options like that where I can since there's a lot of other things that the MC isn't given much of a choice in. Thank you for the kind words! I am happy to be in your bookmarks (very cozy, 5 stars, highly recommend). ^_^
It's well under way, my dear! I can't say for sure, but I anticipate updating before the end of the year. I'll have a better idea of when after next week. My hope is for November at the latest. (There's going to be some very choice Oswin moments too.) ^_^
LOL, I can totally tell. I am hot on the heels of chapter 5 already (26k words). If you have Tumblr, I've posted a couple ask responses with little mini-drabbles or POVs if that will help scratch the itch a little! ^_^
Not yet, but I'm making plans currently! Probably going to start out with just a couple tiers to keep it simple - early releases, side stories, POVS, and of course some spicy things. ^_^
this is a very compelling story!! I'm so glad I stumbled upon while looking for interactive fiction. I cried so much in the scenes with the dads and such, and I kept giggling with the cute things that the LLs do.... I can't wait for more!!
Thank you, my dear! I am happy you enjoyed it so! If it helps, I cried while writing a lot of those, lol. I cry at a lot of things (commercials get me sometimes), so I'm glad I'm not the only one with misty eyes! ^_^
I ALREADY LOVE THIS AAAAAAA I'm so happy to stumble upon this-- SO MANY CHOICES TO BE >:DD
I love all the characters, for the life of me, I cannot pick, they are equally interesting and fun to interact with!!
Oswin is that childhood sweetheart, turned distant-- but actually cares??? I'm cooked chat, I'M ACTUALLY GONNA FOLD-- (god its like a slow burn with him, slow burn and angst.) (I am going to CRYYYY LET ME TAKE CARE OF YOUUU RAAAHHHH) (I forgive him, but that backstory with the key hurt me actually-- like--)
Zahn is such a cute thing, (especially in the explicit scenes god-- I love them, I could just devour them whole, they are so NEEDY MWAH--) (I didnt know what gender I wanted them to be, so I flipped a coin and now he's a boy :D) (IT WAS WORTH IT THO-- I LOVE PRETTY BOYS TOO) (also-- religious trauma?? same, I wanna save him from it.)
Duri?? I DIDNT KNOW THE WOLF WAS GONNA BE THEM (I went in bliiindddd--) gosh, they make me blush (I chose them to be a girl because I'm gay for girls who could devour me--) (WHAT?? WHO SAID THAT??) (😰)
also, I chose the mule-- I knoow I KNOW OSWIN GAVE ME LOOKS ON MY SELECTION BUT I CHOSE HERRRR SHE IS MY BESTIE I LOVE HER me and the mule have the same amount of braincells, in which if you combine them, you get 1--
I named the mule Bunn because I saw that mules have long ears, and they look like bunnies to me. she is very pretty and she knows it <33
I love our dads, and my dead mom <33 (never met her, but I stand by it)
also-- I chose being a chef because... well-- no one is a chef in our travels, so I thought being a chef would make me useful in a different way :D (I also think being a badass chef is funny) (Imagine attacking people by seasoning them and frying them up <3)
edit: so sorry-- but is it possible to peg guys and gals in explicit scenes?? I wanna be dominant in most explicit scenes hehe (sorry if its stupid-- I was just wondering ehehe thank you again--) (teeny suggestion) (sorry again--)
It's alright, my dear! I totally understand, I don't find it annoying, you're good. I am doing very well and am hydrated and all that (perpetually sleepy, but that's just life, lol). ^_^
I so thoroughly enjoyed this comment, it was the absolute best thing to read before bed. [Lost my shit at the "(WHAT?? WHO SAID THAT??)"]
I had the most fun dreams after that, lol. I am so thrilled that you are loving the story and have a passion for the characters. Bunn is a fabulous name for our mule too! Her ears are especially long even among mule standards.
As for your question, I am not sure yet but I am thinking about it. I think I have a way to do a world-friendly toy that the characters can use for pegging. It could be limited to certain moments, but I'll see what I can do. I'd like those experiences to be as flexible as I can possibly get them. ^_^
Like, respectully, I would suck your dick (if you dont have one, then its a metaphoric dick, yk yk?) (also this is a hyperbole-- I JUST REALLY THINK THIS GAME IS GOOD-)
also, no problem if you cant do it btw!! its not the end of the world, and I'd still love to see this story to its conclusion! I just hope you enjoy yourself making the game! <33 And I'm happy to hear that your life is doing great!! I hope it continues doing so!
also, the way you speak in text makes me visualize that I'm talking to a gentleman/woman/person (like-- HELLO?? HI, UH-- I AM A HUMBLE PEASANT) (I STUMBLED INTO YOUR OFFICE?? AND CURRENTLY STEALING YOUR INK AND PARCHMENT?? UHH NO IM NOT?) (WHAT DO YOU MEAN I'M "currently in the process of escaping through the window that I broke to get in"?? YOU MUST BE SEEING THINGS)
all that to say that you sound very proffesional, I am so embarassed to be in your presence, teehee~ (why did I type so much) (and went on a tangent on an imaginary senario???????)
You're an absolute joy, my dear, lol. I appreciate that you'd go to such hyperbolic levels to show your appreciation. Can definitively say it's a first for me, lol.
I appreciate that you see me being a genteel soul, and I can be, but I'm actually a goblin in a suit (no pants though, but I have a bowtie). The more you get to know me, the more you see the goblin. So don't be embarrassed, I quite like your way of things - you are terribly cool to me. ^_^
The ages in this confuse me. After the timeskip, it says the MC is 24, but also starting their 24th year, making them 23. I think the same happened when the MC was 7/8 and 13/14. Is this a mistake or did I misunderstand something?
Hello my friend! I'll be on the lookout for errors here. The ages did change during editing for the first draft a very long time ago, so there may be something off about the wording in some places. I've provided some clarity below, but I'll be sure to proofread for continuity when I can. Thank you for the heads up! ^_^
At the conclusion of the Prologue and start of chapter 1, MC is only 5 years old (Lakota is 1 year older and Oswin nearly 4 years older but hasn't hit his 9th birthday just yet). After the first bout with the illness, there's a summary for the 3 years in-between that covers the rest of age 5 and on through age 8 (the incident in the barn happens during this time and is meant to be in the same year the MC is 8 years old). In that same year, before their 9th birthday, is when MC picks their favored skill/profession. After this there is another summed up few years that leads up to the 14th birthday - the "Name Day." During that summary there is mention of Lakota's name day, which occurs a year prior to the MC's, so the wording there may be confusing. Once the MC turns 14, there is a 10 year skip to jettison them into their next most important birthday. The MC is turning 24 the same day the mark appears, this would be the start of their 24th year. This is where most of the character creation is concluded and ends chapter 1 and bleeds into chapter 2.
But the 24th birthday is the start of the 25th year, no? It means that the 24th year is now complete, so the next one starts. Like someone's first birthday, when they turn one year old, marks the end of their first year in life and the start of their second one. So the number of someone's birthday is the number of years they have behind them. That kind of phrasing is used rather frequently, so that may be where the confusion stems from.
I think we may be just from different semantics on that. For me, the 24th birthday is the start of the 24th year - the year you spend at age 24 might be a better way to phrase it. I can see it your way of course, it's just not from my frame of reference I guess. Like, I had my 37th b-day last month, that day marked the beginning of my 37 years walking this earth. It's almost like not counting the first 12 months of infancy honestly lol (like the counter starts at 0 and you build up to age 1 and so on). It's just the way I know it at least.
Also, just a little confused, does this have love triangles or stuff? Ngl it's hard not to reach to the halfgod even when going oswin routes...this is hard choice
That is correct, there are 4 "main" love interests and a 5th mystery man who hasn't been revealed yet.
No Love triangles or poly in this one, but you can flirt and such until you choose a love interest (or none) to lock into. Oswin and Duri are creating a lot of conflicts of late, so you're not alone there. ^_^
What a wonderful story, so well done! The writing is excellent, the world and lore are compelling, and I absolutely love all the characters. Though Oswin has to be my fave! I’ve had this sitting in my collection for awhile now and am finally getting around to reading it, and kicking myself for waiting so long. I am thoroughly invested and can’t wait to read more!
I'm am so glad you enjoy it, my friend! At least by waiting, you probably got a couple more chapter updates since you added it, lol. I'm working on chapter 5 now, so hopefully sometime this fall I'll have more for you to enjoy! ^_^
AAAAAAAAEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE I quite enjoyed this Interactive Fiction and will be regarding this with illuminating approval. Yours sincerely, bgataghaolsinshe de III
Choosing between Duri and Oswin is like answering 500 questions of advanced math back-to-back underwater upsidedown while being chased by a dragon. It's just too hard to choose one 😭
And it's probably going to just get worse, lol. We're reaching advanced calculus levels, and the dragon is timing you on your test while also trying to eat you.
um idk if this is a error on my hand but when it gives you the choice on body type it does not let me choose and pick the body type i want, So idk whats happening so i thinks its a error im not sure tho :'3
I am glad you love it! Duri was probably more an inspiration (though not a super-direct one) from (Yoko) Kurama from Yu Yu Hakusho (though Kurama is a fox-demon and not a wolf). He's where the interest in magical-transforming/shifting beings first started (loooong time ago). Though, I have a soft spot for Inuyasha as well! The ears are irresistible! ^_^
This is genuinely one of the best stories i've read on here. One of the only times reading a story where the MC transitioning from child to adult actually made me feel sad in a way and not secretly happy its over so we could move onto the romance and other juicy stuff. As if I was actually going along this transition w/ the MC. Missing childhood. You wrote the growing up scenes all so well where I genuinely felt connected to the MC's parents and the Twinflowers. Even our grandma who we didn't get so many scenes with. Also, our horse !! You really know how to get us readers connected to each one of your characters- it's amazing. I truly love Oswin and am so beyond curious what secret he's been holding onto that has had him push away from the MC. I'm a sucker for childhood friends secretly mutually pining after one another so I love it. But like other comments- Duri has made it difficult (as well as Zahn - what another lovable and playful character.... oh, and also Nathan omfg !!). I'm determined that Oswin will be my current MC's endgame, but you've definitely made it difficult to choose for my first run (because I know for sure I will be doing multiple playthroughs of this). It's genuinely crazy I haven't seen this story until now but i'm so glad I have!! Can't wait for the next updates and what more angst and pain you'll put everyone through (and i'll eat it up everytimeeee...like you even had me tear up at some parts e.g. where the MC calls out for her dads when she's last in pain was a killer for sure) as well as whatever other projects you work on in the future!
I am so happy you are enjoying it so much! I totally know what you mean with the childhood transition. I've read several IFs where I am just like, please can we grow up now? LOL I just wanted to hit the highlights and build the necessary connections to others since I was eager to get to the meat of the story. And, of course, we'll have some flashbacks to childhood as we go along (especially with Oswin and remembering grandmother Ravinder). There's some fun twists and turns (and PAIN) in store for everyone, so I think you'll have much to look forward to! ^_^
No shame there, but if you want to follow on Tumblr, I regularly post status updates so you don't have to watch itch from the bushes, lol. But no judgement from me if you like to loom around here either though. :D
OMG, 12!? I'm so happy you're enjoying it so much! I'm already doing outlining for chapter 5, so no worries there. I hope to grant your wish as soon as possible. ^_^
Love fantasy the highlights in this story for me is a about seven points in total
1 the world building
feels super unique and original especially when you customize your character people comment on eye color tattoos scars and your job background which is super
2 the main story
Not super complicated you feel like the sickness the mc actually plays into the game and how you respond in the world feels like it has bearing on the other characters or environment
3 Romance choices
Tried them all so far wolfgod by far feels the most authentic ex best friend is to slow burn for me the adorable priest is just the best soft boy of the series though the merchant I just can't vibe with so please more wolf god interactions
4 Will the mc always come off as so weak
Regardless of background so far the mcs on my playthroughs always seem so fragile is that by design or will they grow stronger as the progress
5 will the curse have influence to the type of magic the mc can do if any ?
6 will custom weapons ever be a thing?
7 sorry for all the questions just really enjoying the story so far
Your list has brought a bit smile to me, my dear. I promise more wolfy-shenanigans to come soon.
As for #4 - the MC's agency and action being cruelly taken is serving as part of a building drama in the background. Some play their MCs as capable and take-charge, but the way this is working out for MC here is that they can't be that even if they want. This tension may lead an MC come apart in some way). But not to worry, we are building up to something good and your MC isn't going down without a fight.
For #5 - the mark will not influence MC's magical capabilities. It will add some flavor later in the story but overall it's mainly the physical appearance of the mark that is effected by your choice.
#6 - MC will make a trip home soon. For MCs that already wield weapons, they'll be able to hone what they have in their arsenal. For those who do not typically have weapons, they'll get a chance to learn one and take it with them.
#7 - no worries! I'm happy to answer as long as there's no spoilers. ^_^
I love this so, so much. Like others have said, it's very well written, I have become invested with all the characters (the main group and the side characters), I love our Dads and will throw down hands if anything happens to them, and I can't -wait- to see what else is in store.
You're in luck, in chapter 6 (I anticipate with the current pacing) you'll get to throw those hands! Which also means your parents will be in danger, but ignore that for now.
Nathan is a menace, but he knows he can get away with it because he has that older-guy-handsomeness thing going for him, lol. ^_^
Older-guy-handsomeness is my one weakness. How did you know?! XD
Now, I'm sweating about (possibly) chapter 6. ;>.< But I will throw these hands so hard, no one messes with our Dads.
For real though, I love your IF. I'm really happy that we can pretty much just flirt with like...almost anything that has two legs, more or less, lol! It's makes it very enjoyable...or it adds to an already enjoyable experience. I know that it might not be everyone's cup of tea, but I do love options, and boy do you provide options. Not just with flirting and how you can go about it, (by the way, I love that we can be bold or shy. I know myself personally, I wouldn't be bold, just a tomato-colored awkward armadillo), but how much we can customize our MCs to a degree that I haven't seen in any IF that I have played before. So I thank you so much for all this work that you have put in so far, and an eagerly waiting all the hard work that is incoming with each chapter. It is appreciated and adored, and I can't wait to meet the rest of the cast.
Don't you worry, well - worry a little maybe - but you'll get a chance to show off those hands either way.
I totally get that. Sometimes you just wanna flirt around - it's fun! Especially when you get a rise out of the ROs, lol. I'm glad you enjoy that aspect, my dear. I really want to provide as much variety in the interactions as I'm capable of so the MC feels as real as you and me. ^_^
This is honestly the best thing I've played. The story is so good and I love all of the characters. I can't wait for more❤️❤️❤️ (I literally stayed up till the sun came up playing this lol)
I am not at all ashamed to admit that I stayed up all night, and well into early morning to play this. It is so well written, and the characters, and world building have been wonderful. I could gush about this for several paragraphs, but instead I'll just opt to say it's been beautiful.
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omg i love the plot and the characters- damn they're so fine. Also is there a chance that there's poly routes!! I would love to see one with Duri and Oz, literally one's a wolf and u have a guy trying to convince evryone that wolves will never hurt anyone unless necessary though not necessarily Duri in particular >:D seems like there could be more going on HAHA literally thinking abt how Oz may bicker with Duri when he's in human form but softens whenever he's in wolf form bcos he can't help his fondness for his wolf form! eager for the next chapter while i go back to studying for my finals hehe :3
peak fiction fr ToT I AM SOSOSO INVESTED TO SEE HOW THIS TURNS OUT!!!!
comments on our companions/ROs
(playing with a female character for now)
oswin: he's got that dawg in him but i like his protective spirit
zahn: such a goofy goober, love him
duri: why does he remind me of gale and halsin from BG3 at the same time
i love the dads and lakota sm!!! they really make me feel like my character got the love she needs to keep going!
and i love my horsie Luchika ofc :3
keep it up!!! I really am invested to see how this goes!
if there's one thing i can recommend
listen to some music when writing <3 really helps get you into the vibe of what you write... i personally listened to the MHRise soundtrack while reading because oml it fit well with my character (fiorayne)...
but enough yapping from a monster hunter nerd... ENJOY THIS PEAK! i'm rooting for you!! and in the words of palpatine... "We will watch your career with great interest."
-love, LightningMeliodas, just a random monster hunter nerd and avid gamer.
rip cow :(
(this is sososososso good omg)
Thank you, my friend! Sorry about the cow, lol. ^_^
I just finished through chapter 4 and I love this so muchhh. (btw maybe spoilers so CAUTION :> )
Anyways, I just want to say how much I love this story, the world building, even the characters!
I love the parents so muchhh, right when they were mentioned, I already loved them (I even maybe almost cried at a few scenes including the cow scene tbh )
I also really love all the little details and interactions with the characters and how they interacted w/ each other (platonic or not).
And I just wanted to say, the world building of this story is amazing, every little addition to the story always left me a little amazed. I really can't wait until chapter 5 comes out!
Though I do understand writing all that takes a lot time (and work!) So take your time ofc! Take breaks if you need them!
Anyways, for now, I'll probably re-play for each of the romances/companions (prob Duri first) >:D
Thank you so much for the kind words, my friend! I am so glad you are finding so much to enjoy. I can't wait to get chapter 5 out, my goal is to have it out this month (it's been a rough month though, but I am striving forward on it)! ^_^
To start it off: If you're hesitating on reading this. STOP. READ IT NOW!!! I PROMISE IT'S WORTH IT. VERY MUCH SO! PLS, READ IT AND SWOON WID ME!!!!!! QAQ
(long message ahead I apologize in advance so sorry ;_;)
The way my lips curled down in desperate sadness after seeing "Thank you for reading" 😭 I've never felt so so SO hollow before, it's just so GOOD. GREAT. AMAZING! I LOVE IT SO MUCH!!! So hey, dear author... what do you say about another faithful fan who pledges that this is one of her favorite IFs of all time now ;)
I LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE my parents. Da 'n Papa! They're such lovable and caring fathers I couldn't have asked for better ones. I love them with all my heart, I can't wait to get better and to go home and hug them again!!! (that one scene with MC crying for their parents' company and wanting to go home while in pain broke me btw)
ANYWAY. I romanced Oswin the entirety of the game (tho I did stray away a couple times to check what would happen with the other ROs... cough) but I always went back to choose my beloved Oswin in the end! All the events with him, his moments, I treasure them all with my whole heart! I have so much more to say about him, but I'll bleed my heart out once the game iz finished. (pls expect like 100k words) (the key scene made me bawl btw)
Ok so to summarize how I feel about the others:
Lakota: BEST.FRIEND.EVER.
Mule (I named her... uh, better not say): I've only had her for a day and a half, but if anything happened to her, I would kill everyone in this room and then myself.
Zahn: The sweetest, they deserve more LOVE. So caring and kind, like cotton-candy. Adorable af. 2nd fav after Oswin<3
Duri: Fluffy. Sexy. Hot. Did I mention FLUFFY yet?
She-wolf: I've only had her for a day and a half, but if anything happened to her, I would kill everyone in this room and then myself.
Nathan: HOT. Love the pet-names btw. (WHY IS HE NOT AN RO????!!!!)
that's that, I can't wait to meet the others! so so so excited!!!
Everyone is EXTREMELY loveable. I can't find myself hating or disliking anyone!!! HOW, author?! You're amazing! Truly, thank you for this. Genuinely made my day. (The Election Ruined It But You Made Me Feel Better) Please always take breaks, stay hydrated! I love you so much (as a fan) Will be rooting for you and this masterpiece of a story<3333
Awe, my friend you are too kind! Your message made my day - big time.
I am so happy to add you to the coven of devoted fans, my dear. There is always room here. ^_^
I am thrilled that you have found so much to love about it, and I can't wait to share more with you (also, no shame in sampling the other ROs, we'll just keep that between us, lol).
I will strive to bring more memorable and lovable moments with these precious characters in the months to come. I also had a rough day and spent it in and out of despair. But GC will be a safe space for me, for you, and for everyone that comes here. Thank you for stopping by and for the sweet message, it was a truly bright light for me today. ^_^
I love this game so much. It feels really unsettling sometimes(cow doesnt go moo anymore), but it adds onto the story and i really liked it :D
I'm glad you love it, my friend!
If it helps, the cow thing might be the most traumatizing bit that I have planned...maybe, lol.
We haven't gotten to the nightmares yet though...I'm not too far in, but I've made decent progress, and I have a few complaints. Know that this is meant to be helpful, and that this is literally all the fault I can find in this game. It's a very fun game so far.
- Dear god, there are so many grammatical errors. This entire thing is gonna need to be proofread to clear them all out. Most of them are harmless, mostly only annoying to grammar nuts like me, but some do obfuscate you intentions a little.
- Menu navigation is a touch borked. Sometimes back to game doesn't work (though you do seem aware of it, thank you for offering solutions to that one) and if I ever save, the save menu WILL NOT reopen unless I open and close settings.
- I am very early on, so I may not have the best perspective of it, but I have to say that the game does seem a bit designed with female characters in mind. It's not too bad, but it is noticeable, particularly in the customization at the start of the game.
And that's it. Man, if that's all the flaw I can find (and I started looking), you're doing pretty good. Just some gentle editing and a bit of wrangling of the spaghetti code, and you've got a quality work right here. I'd pay around $15 for this with those changes. With these current issues, though, it ends up feeling a little unprofessional, which makes it a much harder sell. Seeming even a little unprofessional does pretty big harm to your salability. But again, this is far less work than many games need, and it's one fun game. I hope this little criticism helps, and I hope to see this baby on Steam one day.
I will say the last few parts of your criticisms seem highly unnecessary - because the IF is currently free (and free games or books etc. will be quite unprofessional) also most IF authors I've seen who charge anything have a patreon (that the author doesn't have) which you opt into for bonus content
The most I've seen an IF go for is 12$ (I think authors deserve more but that's besides the point) and that's on the high end
Which is all to say whatever prices the author 'would' charge you'd get about what you'd pay for but the author isn't charging anything so it's not worth speculating on
I think speculating on what it "would" go for IS important - this says demo, after all, which implies a full, paid version. And I was only attempting to state what I would pay with that comment, not what it would be worth. Also, does IF stand for interactive fiction? I've never seen that acronym before.
Yes! If you search IF games anything interactive fiction will show up
Also I would sorta be repeating myself but since Lunan said they've recently thought about selling the full game and writing with that goal in mind I'll leave that discussion and thought process for them (lord knows I'm never gonna make an IF myself lol)
I'm with you on that. I like to give my input about what's "wrong", because everything else is so right, but I'm just some guy. And who am I to proclaim something objectively anything? I just believe player feedback is important. But at the end of the day, everything is up to Lunan. As long as this story concludes satisfactorily, I won't complain.
Thank you, my dear, I do appreciate constructive notes, especially since I do this project alone! ^_^
I know there is going to be issues since I have no real editor or play-tester and am learning as I go. I had 2 people very briefly proof the beginning, but other than that, it's just been me. I have never coded anything in my life before this either. So, this spaghetti is going to be unhinged, my friend, lol.
Going to note too, that when I began this project - it was not for salability. It was just for the passion of it (the thought of putting it on Steam was like a far-off and untouchable dream). While I wanted it as professional as I could manage, that wasn't the end-goal, so those things were not a focus. It wasn't until sort of recently, with readers encouraging me, that I began really thinking about polishing and selling it one day. It would be a dream come true, to be sure.
Since I am now looking at possibly selling it one day, it will get extensive copyediting and refining. I just want the full story out for right now.
The menu navigation will get an overhaul when I can focus on it. I have a lot of things I want to implement on the stats along with a journal page to track the story. What's there now just won't suffice for all I have planned. I think some of the issues rest in template I've used, but with some research I can fix them.
I've had the "female-leaning" reference made once before, and I'll say what I said then - I truly believe that depends on your perception of what is inherently male, female or anything in-between. I do realize most of my audience is female-leaning, but I have more often received comments that my writing wasn't as gendered as most out there. I do not believe in gender roles or that things should be gendered - period. The lens I see through is a-gendered as it is, so I just don't see it, personally.
Hey, don't worry too much. I also said all this as something of a utilitarian - most people looking at indie stuff don't care too much about professionalism, and I'm a grammar nut, so most people playing won't notice most of those little errors. As for the female-leaning thing, it's only really even noticeable in character creation, and even then, not all that visible unless you're looking. And the menu navigation was already something you were clearly aware of, so I'm not fussed about it.
Hmm...that was quite unexpected. You really should mention either in the description or in the trigger warning section that we have two gay fathers....I think that's...a bit important no? Sorry but I can't read your story because of that. But I wish you good luck with your work.
Two gay dads do not require a trigger warning, but your comment sure does for homophobia. Don't be sorry, if that is where your line is, I'd rather you not read my work anyway, and I certainly do not need your well-wishes either.
FACTS!!!
That's fine, but you still need to give some warning about it because your work could be seen by other people who aren't looking for that kind of content. They're not gender-selectable like everyone else, you feel me?
No, I do not.
https://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/trigger%20warning
Gay parents are not disturbing or upsetting content.
Well, you don't have to put it in the trigger warning specifically. What I'm saying is that you need to make it more obvious in the description who finds and adopts the main character. Because I read it and didn't catch that. Maybe adding Gay tag will also help.
You are not understanding, and I fully realize that you will likely not in a conversation with me. Should readers be "notified" about heterosexual parents too? I suspect your answer is 'no.' That is my issue with what you are suggesting. I will not treat parents with non-hetero orientations any differently in fiction or in real life. End of story.
You need a trigger warning... for what now? I'm pretty sure this game is literally in the LGBT category in the tags. I don't think I've ever read a book that had a big red sign that said "gays portrayed!! read with caution" goodluck in your pursuit of divine heterosexual literature.
The LGBT category doesn't say much. I've played a huge number of games from this category and I'm quite happy with everything. Because either I choose the gender of the characters or I can ignore romantic interests that don't suit my tastes. Here it's absolutely inevitable, so it's worth putting some kind of warning about it. Maybe adding a Gay tag would be nice.
We've established that isn't going to happen because it's ridiculous and the author doesn't want to and it's their work so this is a redundant argument. You made your suggestion and We've established this game is not for you. Good luck in your pursuit once again. I love the gay dad's. I hope they stay forever and always Amen.
Why do you feel so attacked that they put two homosexual parents when it really doesn't effect anyone nor anything. It's painful to see you whine over a game that you don't have to play or even think about. It just really aggrivates me, that small-minded people exist and are more prominent on the internet as ever, as someone who has been discriminated for the person who I am sexually I am intrested in. LGBTQ tags were put in for people who don't like those kinds of things; LGBTQ tags shouldn't be used for what you are describing.
What i legit fail to understand myself is what exactly is the trigger warning here supposed to be for? Because they are gay? Andddd??? It's not like they are out here having sex in every scene or walking around with their asses out. And even if they were this is an 18+ rated game 🙄 but they aren't they are raising an orphan wtf is so triggering about that?
Stupid shit like this makes my brain hurt. Christ alive. Oh no look it's two people who love each other. The horror...
weirdo
Must be Mormon lol
My Mormon nan would go to fisticuffs (probably lose) for her gay son. Not all Mormons suck :>
I've never made reviews or rated stories but this was amazing! it took my attention and the characters are to die for! I'm totally obsessed wit oswin. i love how brutal it is but also charming, and i cant get over papa and da :0. i cant wait to see wat happens next :)
I am thankful that you have stopped by, my dear, and that you are enjoying my story and characters. Brutal and charming is the best compliment to me, lol. I am really shooting for this very month for the next chapter as well, so I hope it won't too long for you to wait! ^_^
This IF is everything I've ever wanted and more I'm so in love with it! You are incredible author and idk I just don't have enough words to say how much I like this story
Sidenote Duri has my mc's heart completely
Oh I'm so glad you are enjoying it! I hope to bring you more to love this month as well. Duri has proven to be quite the heart-stealer too! ^_^
A friend introduced me to your lovely IF a few days ago and I have already played through the available chapters several times, playing with different options and such. I absolutely love it and am excited to see where the story goes from here! All the characters are so much fun to get to know and I absolutely love the world you have created. Thank you so much for sharing it with us!
Thank you so much for the very kind words. It brings me much joy that you are enjoying reading and rereading. I can't wait to bring you more to love. ^_^
We need chapter five please 🥺
It's in the oven, my friend! I hope to have a tasty chapter ready in November. ^_^
It's great, I love Zahn and Duri so much :D
Thank you! They are quite loveable (the trouble is that they kinda know it too), lol.
is it selfish wanting to read the next chapter right now?
Not at all, I totally get that feeling! I'm aiming for November for the next chapter though! If it is done sooner, I will release it sooner. ^_^
thank you so much
Just found and binged this, bookmarked and all. I will be checking back often. What a wonderful job with this so far, truly.
That's awesome! I'm glad you're here, my new friend, and I am so glad you enjoyed it so much! ^_^
(Aiming for an update in November, btw!)
Can't wait!
sigghh i miss Nathan already
You know, me too >_< lol
We should do something about that :D
Second to that! I love the ROs (even though we haven't meet them all, yet), but Nathan is a different story entirely.
And his cat! Got to pet the cat~
Shadow deserves all the love! (Nathan should get some too though, lol) ^_^
Okay, I've only just found this and am more hooked than any other IF i've come across and I have to pause to comment this. (potential spoilers if you haven't played)
I named my character Ravi on name day for the sentiment from parents AND Oswin. And there's a CALL out TO THAT? I absolutely lost my mind. I already knew this was easily already in my top 3, and it just became my top for that absolutely insanely intricate detail. Thank you so much for this insane work of art.
Oh, my friend I am so glad you found that and appreciated it! I love little things like that in IFs, so I'm trying to remember to add them. I have a few things that I plan to go back and code more callbacks to as well. Sometimes when I get into the writing, those details slip from my mind. Thank you so much for your kind words, I hope GC continues to bring you joy as the journey pushes on. ^_^
I can't count how many times I've been happily surprised by some choices given like the characters to invite to what you're doing and such
This really earned it's place in my bookmarks!
You, author and everyone else that had worked on this have really earned my respect :D
I'm so glad you like that, my dear. I want to keep options like that where I can since there's a lot of other things that the MC isn't given much of a choice in. Thank you for the kind words! I am happy to be in your bookmarks (very cozy, 5 stars, highly recommend). ^_^
I'm waiting for the next update:33333 so goooooood. My dear Oswin is so gentle and protective
It's well under way, my dear! I can't say for sure, but I anticipate updating before the end of the year. I'll have a better idea of when after next week. My hope is for November at the latest. (There's going to be some very choice Oswin moments too.) ^_^
duri'naan my beloved...... i definitely know who i want to romance
Oh, they'll be very happy about that, my dear. 🐺
Can't. Stop.Replaying.
*obsessively checks for new chapter for the last 65 days*
Im not obsessed.
Definitely not obsessed.
...ok i might be obsessed
LOL, I can totally tell. I am hot on the heels of chapter 5 already (26k words). If you have Tumblr, I've posted a couple ask responses with little mini-drabbles or POVs if that will help scratch the itch a little! ^_^
Eeee yay!
Do u have a patreon?
Not yet, but I'm making plans currently! Probably going to start out with just a couple tiers to keep it simple - early releases, side stories, POVS, and of course some spicy things. ^_^
I'd for sure subscribe 😃
this is a very compelling story!! I'm so glad I stumbled upon while looking for interactive fiction. I cried so much in the scenes with the dads and such, and I kept giggling with the cute things that the LLs do.... I can't wait for more!!
Thank you, my dear! I am happy you enjoyed it so! If it helps, I cried while writing a lot of those, lol. I cry at a lot of things (commercials get me sometimes), so I'm glad I'm not the only one with misty eyes! ^_^
I ALREADY LOVE THIS AAAAAAA
I'm so happy to stumble upon this-- SO MANY CHOICES TO BE >:DD
I love all the characters, for the life of me, I cannot pick, they are equally interesting and fun to interact with!!
Oswin is that childhood sweetheart, turned distant-- but actually cares??? I'm cooked chat, I'M ACTUALLY GONNA FOLD-- (god its like a slow burn with him, slow burn and angst.) (I am going to CRYYYY LET ME TAKE CARE OF YOUUU RAAAHHHH) (I forgive him, but that backstory with the key hurt me actually-- like--)
Zahn is such a cute thing, (especially in the explicit scenes god-- I love them, I could just devour them whole, they are so NEEDY MWAH--) (I didnt know what gender I wanted them to be, so I flipped a coin and now he's a boy :D) (IT WAS WORTH IT THO-- I LOVE PRETTY BOYS TOO) (also-- religious trauma?? same, I wanna save him from it.)
Duri?? I DIDNT KNOW THE WOLF WAS GONNA BE THEM (I went in bliiindddd--) gosh, they make me blush (I chose them to be a girl because I'm gay for girls who could devour me--) (WHAT?? WHO SAID THAT??) (😰)
also, I chose the mule-- I knoow I KNOW OSWIN GAVE ME LOOKS ON MY SELECTION BUT I CHOSE HERRRR SHE IS MY BESTIE I LOVE HER
me and the mule have the same amount of braincells, in which if you combine them, you get 1--
I named the mule Bunn because I saw that mules have long ears, and they look like bunnies to me. she is very pretty and she knows it <33
I love our dads, and my dead mom <33 (never met her, but I stand by it)
also-- I chose being a chef because... well-- no one is a chef in our travels, so I thought being a chef would make me useful in a different way :D (I also think being a badass chef is funny) (Imagine attacking people by seasoning them and frying them up <3)
edit: so sorry-- but is it possible to peg guys and gals in explicit scenes?? I wanna be dominant in most explicit scenes hehe (sorry if its stupid-- I was just wondering ehehe thank you again--) (teeny suggestion) (sorry again--)
I swear-- I want to say so much-- but I also dont wanna be annoying--
also also, hope that youre doing well! get some rests when needed and even if I dont know who you are, YOURE VERY COOL MWAH MWAH
It's alright, my dear! I totally understand, I don't find it annoying, you're good. I am doing very well and am hydrated and all that (perpetually sleepy, but that's just life, lol). ^_^
YOU are very cool *mwah mwah*.
I so thoroughly enjoyed this comment, it was the absolute best thing to read before bed. [Lost my shit at the "(WHAT?? WHO SAID THAT??)"]
I had the most fun dreams after that, lol. I am so thrilled that you are loving the story and have a passion for the characters. Bunn is a fabulous name for our mule too! Her ears are especially long even among mule standards.
As for your question, I am not sure yet but I am thinking about it. I think I have a way to do a world-friendly toy that the characters can use for pegging. It could be limited to certain moments, but I'll see what I can do. I'd like those experiences to be as flexible as I can possibly get them. ^_^
HASHAHDHVBV STOOPP YOU ARE SUCH A TREATT <33
Like, respectully, I would suck your dick (if you dont have one, then its a metaphoric dick, yk yk?) (also this is a hyperbole-- I JUST REALLY THINK THIS GAME IS GOOD-)
also, no problem if you cant do it btw!! its not the end of the world, and I'd still love to see this story to its conclusion! I just hope you enjoy yourself making the game! <33 And I'm happy to hear that your life is doing great!! I hope it continues doing so!
also, the way you speak in text makes me visualize that I'm talking to a gentleman/woman/person (like-- HELLO?? HI, UH-- I AM A HUMBLE PEASANT) (I STUMBLED INTO YOUR OFFICE?? AND CURRENTLY STEALING YOUR INK AND PARCHMENT?? UHH NO IM NOT?)
(WHAT DO YOU MEAN I'M "currently in the process of escaping through the window that I broke to get in"?? YOU MUST BE SEEING THINGS)
all that to say that you sound very proffesional, I am so embarassed to be in your presence, teehee~ (why did I type so much) (and went on a tangent on an imaginary senario???????)
anyways-- sleep well! and also, NO YOUR COOL--
You're an absolute joy, my dear, lol. I appreciate that you'd go to such hyperbolic levels to show your appreciation. Can definitively say it's a first for me, lol.
I appreciate that you see me being a genteel soul, and I can be, but I'm actually a goblin in a suit (no pants though, but I have a bowtie). The more you get to know me, the more you see the goblin. So don't be embarrassed, I quite like your way of things - you are terribly cool to me. ^_^
The ages in this confuse me. After the timeskip, it says the MC is 24, but also starting their 24th year, making them 23. I think the same happened when the MC was 7/8 and 13/14. Is this a mistake or did I misunderstand something?
Hello my friend! I'll be on the lookout for errors here. The ages did change during editing for the first draft a very long time ago, so there may be something off about the wording in some places. I've provided some clarity below, but I'll be sure to proofread for continuity when I can. Thank you for the heads up! ^_^
At the conclusion of the Prologue and start of chapter 1, MC is only 5 years old (Lakota is 1 year older and Oswin nearly 4 years older but hasn't hit his 9th birthday just yet). After the first bout with the illness, there's a summary for the 3 years in-between that covers the rest of age 5 and on through age 8 (the incident in the barn happens during this time and is meant to be in the same year the MC is 8 years old). In that same year, before their 9th birthday, is when MC picks their favored skill/profession. After this there is another summed up few years that leads up to the 14th birthday - the "Name Day." During that summary there is mention of Lakota's name day, which occurs a year prior to the MC's, so the wording there may be confusing. Once the MC turns 14, there is a 10 year skip to jettison them into their next most important birthday. The MC is turning 24 the same day the mark appears, this would be the start of their 24th year. This is where most of the character creation is concluded and ends chapter 1 and bleeds into chapter 2.
But the 24th birthday is the start of the 25th year, no? It means that the 24th year is now complete, so the next one starts. Like someone's first birthday, when they turn one year old, marks the end of their first year in life and the start of their second one. So the number of someone's birthday is the number of years they have behind them. That kind of phrasing is used rather frequently, so that may be where the confusion stems from.
I think we may be just from different semantics on that. For me, the 24th birthday is the start of the 24th year - the year you spend at age 24 might be a better way to phrase it. I can see it your way of course, it's just not from my frame of reference I guess. Like, I had my 37th b-day last month, that day marked the beginning of my 37 years walking this earth. It's almost like not counting the first 12 months of infancy honestly lol (like the counter starts at 0 and you build up to age 1 and so on). It's just the way I know it at least.
Oh, I am kinda curious, it says 5 LI but we only see 4 written...*eyes* is the god one love interest?
Also, just a little confused, does this have love triangles or stuff? Ngl it's hard not to reach to the halfgod even when going oswin routes...this is hard choice
That is correct, there are 4 "main" love interests and a 5th mystery man who hasn't been revealed yet.
No Love triangles or poly in this one, but you can flirt and such until you choose a love interest (or none) to lock into. Oswin and Duri are creating a lot of conflicts of late, so you're not alone there. ^_^
What a wonderful story, so well done! The writing is excellent, the world and lore are compelling, and I absolutely love all the characters. Though Oswin has to be my fave! I’ve had this sitting in my collection for awhile now and am finally getting around to reading it, and kicking myself for waiting so long. I am thoroughly invested and can’t wait to read more!
I'm am so glad you enjoy it, my friend! At least by waiting, you probably got a couple more chapter updates since you added it, lol. I'm working on chapter 5 now, so hopefully sometime this fall I'll have more for you to enjoy! ^_^
heheh noodles ( I giggled for a full 30 seconds at that you can't do this to me )
I am so glad that another takes as much joy in pasta as I. ^_^ 🍜🍝
I'll be adding more flavor text for that name choice in the future as well.
AAAAAAAAEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE I quite enjoyed this Interactive Fiction and will be regarding this with illuminating approval. Yours sincerely, bgataghaolsinshe de III
I am thrilled to see the light of your approval, my friend! ^_^
Yours truly, Lu
Just done yet another playthrough gods I need more of this world so good
There's more in the oven, my dear! ^_^ Glad you're enjoying it!
I think I might stop breathing this is genuinly the best story I have ever read, and I've read a lot of stories
Oh no, honey, don't do that. Here, have some CPR. Don't spend it all in one place though.
Thank you, my friend! I'm really happy you're enjoying it! Maybe keep an inhaler handy. ^_^
I will :) I need to keep breathing so I can check for updates and replay the game (again)
Choosing between Duri and Oswin is like answering 500 questions of advanced math back-to-back underwater upsidedown while being chased by a dragon. It's just too hard to choose one 😭
On one hand, I want my flirty and bold doggo, but in the other gand, I want my recluse and emo "friend". 💔
I have two hands, but the author power strikes again >:((
Just wait until the mystery suitor enters the ring with the steel chair.
Nuh uh, I'll forever be loyal to those two... probably...
I appreciate someone who can remain loyal (probably) in the face of a threatening chair.
A chair, after all, has many uses. Maybe I could use said chair to smacc the living hell of this suitor if he lays a finger on me
And it's probably going to just get worse, lol. We're reaching advanced calculus levels, and the dragon is timing you on your test while also trying to eat you.
PLEASE MAKE THEM, POLY I BEG YOU
um idk if this is a error on my hand but when it gives you the choice on body type it does not let me choose and pick the body type i want, So idk whats happening so i thinks its a error im not sure tho :'3
wait!! fixed it! just had to refresh the page!!! ^^ oh and very good game so far!!
Glad you got it to work! Hope you enjoy the rest of your journey! ^_^
I love this, but please tell me that Duri was inspired by Inuyasha because omg
I am glad you love it! Duri was probably more an inspiration (though not a super-direct one) from (Yoko) Kurama from Yu Yu Hakusho (though Kurama is a fox-demon and not a wolf). He's where the interest in magical-transforming/shifting beings first started (loooong time ago). Though, I have a soft spot for Inuyasha as well! The ears are irresistible! ^_^
A person with incredible taste!
This is genuinely one of the best stories i've read on here. One of the only times reading a story where the MC transitioning from child to adult actually made me feel sad in a way and not secretly happy its over so we could move onto the romance and other juicy stuff. As if I was actually going along this transition w/ the MC. Missing childhood. You wrote the growing up scenes all so well where I genuinely felt connected to the MC's parents and the Twinflowers. Even our grandma who we didn't get so many scenes with. Also, our horse !! You really know how to get us readers connected to each one of your characters- it's amazing. I truly love Oswin and am so beyond curious what secret he's been holding onto that has had him push away from the MC. I'm a sucker for childhood friends secretly mutually pining after one another so I love it. But like other comments- Duri has made it difficult (as well as Zahn - what another lovable and playful character.... oh, and also Nathan omfg !!). I'm determined that Oswin will be my current MC's endgame, but you've definitely made it difficult to choose for my first run (because I know for sure I will be doing multiple playthroughs of this). It's genuinely crazy I haven't seen this story until now but i'm so glad I have!! Can't wait for the next updates and what more angst and pain you'll put everyone through (and i'll eat it up everytimeeee...like you even had me tear up at some parts e.g. where the MC calls out for her dads when she's last in pain was a killer for sure) as well as whatever other projects you work on in the future!
I am so happy you are enjoying it so much! I totally know what you mean with the childhood transition. I've read several IFs where I am just like, please can we grow up now? LOL I just wanted to hit the highlights and build the necessary connections to others since I was eager to get to the meat of the story. And, of course, we'll have some flashbacks to childhood as we go along (especially with Oswin and remembering grandmother Ravinder). There's some fun twists and turns (and PAIN) in store for everyone, so I think you'll have much to look forward to! ^_^
im ashame to say i check this daily to see if it updates
No shame there, but if you want to follow on Tumblr, I regularly post status updates so you don't have to watch itch from the bushes, lol. But no judgement from me if you like to loom around here either though. :D
you have a tumblr? i would like to follow can you give me a link?
Sure thing, dear!
https://wings-of-ink.tumblr.com/?source=share
Can't wait for more replayed twelve times felt different every time so addicted to it please write more
OMG, 12!? I'm so happy you're enjoying it so much! I'm already doing outlining for chapter 5, so no worries there. I hope to grant your wish as soon as possible. ^_^
Love fantasy the highlights in this story for me is a about seven points in total
1 the world building
feels super unique and original especially when you customize your character people comment on eye color tattoos scars and your job background which is super
2 the main story
Not super complicated you feel like the sickness the mc actually plays into the game and how you respond in the world feels like it has bearing on the other characters or environment
3 Romance choices
Tried them all so far wolfgod by far feels the most authentic ex best friend is to slow burn for me the adorable priest is just the best soft boy of the series though the merchant I just can't vibe with so please more wolf god interactions
4 Will the mc always come off as so weak
Regardless of background so far the mcs on my playthroughs always seem so fragile is that by design or will they grow stronger as the progress
5 will the curse have influence to the type of magic the mc can do if any ?
6 will custom weapons ever be a thing?
7 sorry for all the questions just really enjoying the story so far
Your list has brought a bit smile to me, my dear. I promise more wolfy-shenanigans to come soon.
As for #4 - the MC's agency and action being cruelly taken is serving as part of a building drama in the background. Some play their MCs as capable and take-charge, but the way this is working out for MC here is that they can't be that even if they want. This tension may lead an MC come apart in some way). But not to worry, we are building up to something good and your MC isn't going down without a fight.
For #5 - the mark will not influence MC's magical capabilities. It will add some flavor later in the story but overall it's mainly the physical appearance of the mark that is effected by your choice.
#6 - MC will make a trip home soon. For MCs that already wield weapons, they'll be able to hone what they have in their arsenal. For those who do not typically have weapons, they'll get a chance to learn one and take it with them.
#7 - no worries! I'm happy to answer as long as there's no spoilers. ^_^
Can't wait too read more great work
I love this so, so much. Like others have said, it's very well written, I have become invested with all the characters (the main group and the side characters), I love our Dads and will throw down hands if anything happens to them, and I can't -wait- to see what else is in store.
Also, Nathaniel is a flirty menace and I love it~
You're in luck, in chapter 6 (I anticipate with the current pacing) you'll get to throw those hands!
Which also means your parents will be in danger, but ignore that for now.Nathan is a menace, but he knows he can get away with it because he has that older-guy-handsomeness thing going for him, lol. ^_^
Older-guy-handsomeness is my one weakness. How did you know?! XD
Now, I'm sweating about (possibly) chapter 6. ;>.< But I will throw these hands so hard, no one messes with our Dads.
For real though, I love your IF. I'm really happy that we can pretty much just flirt with like...almost anything that has two legs, more or less, lol! It's makes it very enjoyable...or it adds to an already enjoyable experience. I know that it might not be everyone's cup of tea, but I do love options, and boy do you provide options. Not just with flirting and how you can go about it, (by the way, I love that we can be bold or shy. I know myself personally, I wouldn't be bold, just a tomato-colored awkward armadillo), but how much we can customize our MCs to a degree that I haven't seen in any IF that I have played before. So I thank you so much for all this work that you have put in so far, and an eagerly waiting all the hard work that is incoming with each chapter. It is appreciated and adored, and I can't wait to meet the rest of the cast.
Especially ????.
<3
Don't you worry, well - worry a little maybe - but you'll get a chance to show off those hands either way.
I totally get that. Sometimes you just wanna flirt around - it's fun! Especially when you get a rise out of the ROs, lol. I'm glad you enjoy that aspect, my dear. I really want to provide as much variety in the interactions as I'm capable of so the MC feels as real as you and me. ^_^
This is honestly the best thing I've played. The story is so good and I love all of the characters. I can't wait for more❤️❤️❤️ (I literally stayed up till the sun came up playing this lol)
I hope you caught some sleep afterwards! I am so thrilled you enjoyed it so, my dear! ^_^
I did XD I was tired the next day but it was totally worth it lol
I am not at all ashamed to admit that I stayed up all night, and well into early morning to play this. It is so well written, and the characters, and world building have been wonderful. I could gush about this for several paragraphs, but instead I'll just opt to say it's been beautiful.
I hope you got some rest at some point, my friend, but I am pleased as punch that it drove you to such lengths! ^_^
i fell in love with this so much i hope this isn't like abandoned or something
Hello dear! Barring death or dismemberment, I'm dedicated to finishing, so don't you worry. I know the sting of abandoned projects all too well!
I am glad that you love it! ^_^
thank you i'll keep checking for updates then